Thread:Cdrzillafanon/@comment-26155602-20161124040400/@comment-26155602-20161223200938

Cdrzillafanon wrote: Just found episode 1. I have compiled a list of critisicms, as well as things I liked. I will have four lists, two for part one, and two for part two.

Critisicms:

-Try to work on the lighting. the scene with G14 on the computer was painfull dark.

-You can go to more of an effort to hide your arm.

-Holding up a figure in the air while having the camera follow them to simulate movement just....doesn't work. Ever.

-With the afore mentioned lighting issue, I would reccomand not filmings scenes on the stairs.

-Your voice sounds stuffy. Are you sick, or are you just trying to make G14 sound tired?

-The scene of G14 "drinking" was downright cringey. I would reccomand actually removing the bottle cap if you intend to film other scenes like that.

-Once again, lighting. Does your camera have a flashlight?

-How does G14 immediatley know that the egg is a Mothra egg?

-If your series has multiple Godzillas, I would reccomend not calling one of them just "Godzilla". It makes things confusing.

-Mario wierdly sounded like Megatron from the stop motion series "Transformers Inifinity". This is just something I noticed, not an actual critisicm.

-Advice for the future. Please don't ship Godzilla and Mothra. I have a feeling it might go there now that G14 has to care for the egg.

-How does G14 know that the larva inside the egg was female?

-G14 screaming at the camera near the end was the cringiest thing I've ever seen.

-Stock music. Try to avoid it.

Things I liked:

-The music choices seem pretty good so far

-Godzilla 2014 does not sound like Mechagodzilla. Good job making your characters sound different from one another

-Mario was halarious.

-Fallout kinda was alright. And so was Sonic.

-Rocky was random, but funny.

-Gypsy being lazy should be a funny run on gag.

Now for part two:

Critiscims:

-Your "girl voice". My god.

-Why did the camera zoom in on that DVD shelf?

-I could here your phone in the backround.

-The plot so far is basically Star Wars.

-Why did G14 stare at the camera before the cut to black?

-Mechagodzilla's motivation was lackluster at best

-G14 calling Mechagodzilla a monster made no sense. They are all monsters.

-Otachi came straight out of nowhere. But his voice was funny.

-Yolo? Really? Please try to avoid using outdated memes.

-The Gojis probably could have escaped themselves. Still, the rescue scene was enjoyable.

-Mechagodzilla's defeat was very anticlimactic.

Things I liked:

-Spacegodzilla's voice was great. He seems like the "mentor" type so far. Is he supossed to be a parody of Obi Wan Kenobi?

-Calling it. The two "Terrors" are Red and King Ghidorah

-"Order 69" made me laugh immediatley. So are Red and KG sith?

-Max forgetting his lines was a good bit of fourth wall humor.

-As mentioned before, you made great effort to make all the characters sound different. Good work there.

-Mechagodzilla's menical laugh. Lol.

-"Say good by to your precious egg, Godzillers!".

-Mario's voice got better in part 2.

-Mechagodzilla is such a classic cartoon villain.

Other:

-Is Max the second Godzilla you mentioned? I was expecting the 6-inch FinalGoji, but whatever.

-So are the divine moths Jedi?

-Random Ankylosaurs in the backround

-Why does Mothra talk like a pokemon?

Anyway, those are my thoughts. The episode was all around pretty good, with part 2 being much better than part 1. i will try to improve by next year