Thread:Thegoldnguy/@comment-3367060-20151204050333/@comment-24277243-20151204162640

It's pretty good, but I have a couple grips. The dialogue is a bit silly at times, stuff like "so whatever it is, it's not friendly," and the random usage of Japanese phrases. Don't get me wrong, I totally understand why a Japanese family would use random phrases in their first language, especially if they're only just learning English, but it still feels a little awkward when "Yatta!" pops up before a bunch of English dialogue. Perhaps you could make the English a bit more broken? Maybe?

Despite how silly the dialogue is ("My God, it's worse than we thought!"), I bet it was intentional, which is totally fine, perhaps it's a call back to the monster movies of the fifties?

Overall it was pretty good. The fight scene was pretty decent and the story could work as the film you intend it to be. You might want to revise a couple lines so they sound less awkward, but that's about it, really. GG